Week 14 objective - Peer Review 1

Peer Review for 20508 민효민


Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
4점! classical argument 형식으로 에세이가 깔끔하게 잘 쓰였다.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
영어 교육이 지금과 같다면 문제라는 의견에는 충분한 근거들이 있지만, 왜 현 영어교육이 지속된다면 한국이 글로벌 사회에서 뒤쳐질지에 대한 내용이 조금 더 언급되었으면 좋겠다.

Thesis
What is the thesis?If current English education system does not get to change in this way, Korea will fall behind global society.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes!

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
Korea will fall behind global society if English education system would not change.Any other thoughts?
NO

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Yes

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Yes

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Yes

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
Yes

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
Perfect classical argument structure!

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
Agree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
Still agree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
영어를 못하는 국가가 글로벌 사회에서 뒤쳐질 것이라는 사실에 대한 근거들이 조금 더 많았으면 좋겠다!

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes

Are the sources obvious?
Yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
Yes